Post by Phoebe Turner on May 25, 2006 14:41:45 GMT -5
Just a few reminders for everyone, to note that when RPing you should always write grammatically correctly as well as with the neccessary punctuation and capitalization.
This is not correct.
That is a run-on sentence. Majorly. I've seen alot of posts with similar 'paragraphs', but in reality, it's just one long incorrect sentence. There should have been quite a few more commas and end marks.
Here is how it would be correctly writting.
Got it? Okay. Moving on.
Capitalization.
This should be fairly easy for you, as most have been learning this since first grade. You capitalize nouns and sometimes pronouns (for instance, you would capitalize He (<- like that) if it were referring to a god.) and the first letter of a sentence. I honestly don't understand why some of the things I see capitalized are.
Erm.. just plain no.
Oh, and also.. alot of the names for boards here wouldn't be capitalized. The grass patch wouldn't be, for it isn't a specific place. It's a general area.. and could be anywhere. There could be a grass patch on pluto for all we know. The Forbidden Forest, however, would be, as it is the name given to a specific location.
Moving on..
Repition.
Okay, I'm not speaking of the repition of an idea or moral. I'm talking about using the same words over and over. It gives your writing no variety and makes it a bit annoying to read.
Okay.. firstly, don't use your name or someone elses too often. That's why they invented pronouns. She, you, we, they, her, him, your.. etc.
Secondly, if you're focusing on a specific verb or action try to vary the word you use to describe it. In this case, I used walk far too much. There were so many other verbs or adverbs I could have used to describe it..
If you need help with words and word choosing, I suggest you use an online thesaurus. Then all you have to do is type in a very common word (like walk) and see what other synonyms there are.
Vary your sentences!
Only writing in simple sentences is quite boring for the reader. It doesn't catch their attention. Try using compound (two phrases or sentences linked together by a comma and conjuction or with a semicolon.) sentence or a complex sentence (a dependant clause and an independant claused linked with a comma) every few sentences to give your writing the neccessary clench.
Writing overly long sentences makes me want to scream as well, especially if they aren't correctly punctuated. For a dramatic effect, try writing short sentences or even just one word every once in a while, especially if you are writing with a certain moral or thought.
That's all I have to say for now.. PM me if you wish..
This is not correct.
Pheobe shuffled her feet along heavily walking through the grass patch it seemed like a beautiful day which was good since there hadn't been a bit of sunshine in quite a while, and she could feel the light of the bright morning sun beaming down on her from above with little to no clouds crossing it's path.
That is a run-on sentence. Majorly. I've seen alot of posts with similar 'paragraphs', but in reality, it's just one long incorrect sentence. There should have been quite a few more commas and end marks.
Here is how it would be correctly writting.
Pheobe shuffled her feet along heavily, walking through the grass patch. It seemed like a beautiful day, which was good since there hadn't been a bit of sunshine in quite a while. She could feel the light of the bright morning sun beaming down on her from above, with little to no clouds crossing it's path.
Got it? Okay. Moving on.
Capitalization.
This should be fairly easy for you, as most have been learning this since first grade. You capitalize nouns and sometimes pronouns (for instance, you would capitalize He (<- like that) if it were referring to a god.) and the first letter of a sentence. I honestly don't understand why some of the things I see capitalized are.
Pheobe walked down to the grass patch, Coincidently seeing a familiar Face. She Walked toward it, meeting the Girl half way to the lake.
Erm.. just plain no.
Pheobe walked down to the grass patch, coincidently seeing a familiar face. She walked towrd it, meeting the girl half way to the lake.
Oh, and also.. alot of the names for boards here wouldn't be capitalized. The grass patch wouldn't be, for it isn't a specific place. It's a general area.. and could be anywhere. There could be a grass patch on pluto for all we know. The Forbidden Forest, however, would be, as it is the name given to a specific location.
Moving on..
Repition.
Okay, I'm not speaking of the repition of an idea or moral. I'm talking about using the same words over and over. It gives your writing no variety and makes it a bit annoying to read.
Pheobe walked around steadily, Pheobe's eyes roaming Pheobe's surroundings vigorously. Pheobe liked walking, for it calmed Pheobe's nerves. Walking was quite entertaining on days like this, especially when Pheobe was tired and lonely, or simply had nothing to do..
Okay.. firstly, don't use your name or someone elses too often. That's why they invented pronouns. She, you, we, they, her, him, your.. etc.
Secondly, if you're focusing on a specific verb or action try to vary the word you use to describe it. In this case, I used walk far too much. There were so many other verbs or adverbs I could have used to describe it..
If you need help with words and word choosing, I suggest you use an online thesaurus. Then all you have to do is type in a very common word (like walk) and see what other synonyms there are.
Vary your sentences!
Only writing in simple sentences is quite boring for the reader. It doesn't catch their attention. Try using compound (two phrases or sentences linked together by a comma and conjuction or with a semicolon.) sentence or a complex sentence (a dependant clause and an independant claused linked with a comma) every few sentences to give your writing the neccessary clench.
Writing overly long sentences makes me want to scream as well, especially if they aren't correctly punctuated. For a dramatic effect, try writing short sentences or even just one word every once in a while, especially if you are writing with a certain moral or thought.
That's all I have to say for now.. PM me if you wish..
